Amber Fang 3: Revenge, by Arthur Slade (0:53)
Today we see that an uneven tone can be disorienting, especially on the first page. What I gleaned about the story: Our heroine, a vampire, is on a sunny beach….
Today we see that an uneven tone can be disorienting, especially on the first page. What I gleaned about the story: Our heroine, a vampire, is on a sunny beach….
Today we learn that it’s hard to engage with a story when the narrator won’t tell the reader what’s going on.
Today we see that if your first paragraph loses the reader, the rest don’t matter.
Today we see that with an unknown publisher/author, variations in formatting come across as inexperience rather than intent.
Today we see that when repeated word patterns are persistent, immersion is impossible once you’ve noticed them.