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The Unknown Sun, by Cheryl S. Mackey (13:00)

…then I went to the other thing. = GallopingIdisease.[/dropshadowbox] Writing in the first person is a great way to get us inside the protagonist’s head, but it comes with a hidden trap: the above mentionedIdisease. In third person, the writer has many ways they can refer to the…

Cold Run, by Rachel A. Brune (3:54)

…border_color=”#A35154″]WTF #1: Galloping I disease[/dropshadowbox] Analysis: The book opens on a tsunami of echoingI” sentences, but it was the recurringI“s rather than the sentence or paragraph echoes that really distracted me. As early as the half-way point of page one, I‘d lost…

Strawman Made Steel, by Brett Adams (15:57)

…border_color=”#A35154″]WTF #2: GallopingIdisease[/dropshadowbox] Analysis: The pattern of “I” sentences noticed at the start continues, and if anything, gathers mass. I love the premise that is rapidly unfolding here, of a guy who has teleported into a hospital bathroom in order to get…

We, The Watched, by Adam Bender (5:14)

…border_color=”#A35154″]WTF #3: GallopingIdisease[/dropshadowbox] Analysis: I tried to ignore it, hoping that the frantic dashing around (and talking about being frantic) was just making me over-sensitive, but nope. There’s just way too much “I” talk and it keeps pulling me out of the…

My Tomorrow Your Yesterday, by Jason Ayres (10:35)

…border_color=”#A35154″]WTF #1: GallopingIdisease[/dropshadowbox] Analysis: The epilogue (which may just be a prologue) is littered withI“-sentences, and concludes with four “I“-headed paragraphs in a row. Since very little appears to be happening in the story, there wasn’t much going