ImmerseOrDie Index


All the ImmerseOrDie goodness, gathered together in one sortable, searchable index.

The Apples of Idunn: Eschaton Cycle, by Matt Larkin (40:00)Today we see that when your marketing matches your book, it will hook readers who …2018/07/162018-07-16 07:00:51
Fluency, by Jennifer Foehner Wells (6:23)Today we see that if you promise hard SF on the tin, implausibilities by the …2018/06/182018-06-18 07:00:07
Sliced and Diced: A collection of dark and twisted short stories, by Joan De La Haye (40:00)Today we see that humor can make dark stories seem even darker. What I gleaned …2018/06/042018-06-04 09:44:36
Amber Fang 3: Revenge, by Arthur Slade (0:53)Today we see that an uneven tone can be disorienting, especially on the first page. …2018/05/182018-05-18 08:22:27
Time Code: The Best Collection of 52 Stories You Should Be Reading This Year, by Charles Eugene Anderson (0:36)Today we see that if you’re going to put not one, but two claims of …2018/05/142018-05-14 07:00:33
Burnt Worlds, by S.J. Madill (40:00)Today we have a survivor that shows us what a star empire run by Canadians …2018/05/112018-05-11 07:00:09
Grave Clouds: & Other Dark Tales, by John Allen (1:04)Today we see that frequent inconsistencies combine to erode the reader’s confidence in the author. …2018/05/072018-05-07 07:00:59
Dislocations: Fictions, by Windsor Harries (4:37)Today we see that if you have to explain your description then you’re calling somebody …2018/04/302018-04-30 07:00:01
Cabals of Blood: Tales of Cosmic Horror, by Richard Klu (8:45)Today we see that a single misplaced comma can be enough of a bump to …2018/04/232018-04-23 07:00:21
Like Life Itself: Ten Short Stories, by BP Broome (4:07)Today we see that typesetting conventions keep the text out of the reader’s way. What …2018/04/162018-04-16 07:00:05
A Goldfish Mastermind Named Benedict Cumberbatch & the League of Domesticated Assassins: And Other Unexpected Tales, by Mark R Morris Jr (1:11)Today we see that distractions compound exponentially. What I gleaned about the stories: Being on …2018/04/042018-04-04 07:00:51
The Final Formula, by Becca Andre (26:19)Today we see that the middle of a fight scene is a challenging time to …2018/03/302018-03-30 09:52:30
Scaring the Crows: 21 Tales for Noon or Midnight, by Gregory Miller (10:13)Today we see that if you tell readers too loudly that your book is great, …2018/03/282018-03-28 09:39:23
The Last Outpost, by Hannah Ross (2:04)Today we see that early warning signs are often correct. What I gleaned about the …2018/03/232018-03-23 08:21:32
Just a Little Terrible, by Vincent V. Cava (1:34)Today we see that distracting formatting can prevent a reader from even remembering your prose. …2018/03/192018-03-19 08:24:45
Power for Two Minutes and Other Unrealities, by Mjke Woods (1:18)Today we see that if your front matter contradicts your cover and blurb, readers are …2018/03/122018-03-12 07:00:55
Her demonic Angel: and other short stories, by Joy Mutter (0:32)Today we see that adjectives have a proper ordering and sound wrong when that’s violated. …2018/03/072018-03-07 07:00:55
The Jack of Souls, by Stephen Merlino (40:00)Today we have another installment of From the Firehose. And guess what? This one’s a …2018/03/022018-03-02 07:00:21
Flash Fiction, by Richard Dee (2:28)Today we see that background details are supposed to stay in the background. What I …2018/02/262018-02-26 07:00:25
City Under Ice, by Te Olivant (12:50)Today we see that if you’re going hype an upcoming event, you had better deliver. …2018/02/212018-02-21 07:02:39
Eight Unreal Stories, by John Carter (1:42)Today we see that an error can hit harder if readers think you aren’t the …2018/02/192018-02-19 07:00:48
Disturbed: A collection of five disturbing tales, by Michael Riddell and JJ Riddell (0:38)Today we see that if the copyright declaration (where every word matters) contains multiple basic …2018/02/122018-02-12 07:00:31
Fur Boys, by C.A. Newsome (10:10)Today we see that the opening of a story is a triple balancing act between …2018/02/092018-02-09 07:00:31
Crime, Conflict & Consequences: Short Stories 1, by Heather Burnside (1:35)Today we learn that your typography should be invisible. When it becomes noticeable, it has …2018/02/072018-02-07 07:00:43
Of Cinder & Bone, by Kyoko M. (2:00)Today we see that character descriptions are supposed to be helpful and easy to read. …2018/01/312018-01-31 09:45:45
Becoming Estevan and Other Science-Fiction Tales of Love & Obsession, by McCamy Taylor (0:17)Today we see that if the opening pages of your book suggest you haven’t spent …2018/01/292018-01-29 07:00:46
Dungeons & Diamonds, by Zeppy Cheng (6:14)Today we see that building a good story and rendering good prose are two distinct …2018/01/262018-01-26 07:00:46
Tell the Octopus and other short stories, by Jonathan Day (40:00)Today we see that providing a nickname or other glimpse of how a character lives …2018/01/222018-01-22 07:00:29
Maladaptation, by Adan Ramie (40:00)Today we see that, when you’re writing in tight POV, any description of a thing …2018/01/192018-01-19 07:00:24
Above Ground, by A.M. Harte (5:50)Today we see that when a problem recurs so often that instances start singing to …2018/01/172018-01-17 07:00:14
Stories From Social Media, by Ray Daley (0:55)Today we see that readers reaching the end of your story isn’t a victory if …2018/01/152018-01-15 07:00:13
Thief’s Blade, by C. Greenwood (7:06)Today we see that having a pretty scabbard is nice, but it’s not what swords …2018/01/102018-01-10 07:00:32
Short Stories Found Online, by Jonathan Day (1:31)Today we see that if you fail to show your intermediate steps, readers will judge …2018/01/082018-01-08 07:00:25
Download Initializing, by Adam Myhr (9:19)Today we see that a little professional editing goes a long way. What I gleaned …2018/01/032018-01-03 07:00:18
A Conspiracy of Shadows, by Randy Nargi (8:43)Today we see a fascinating hiccup in the ImmerseOrDie system. Note from Jefferson: Due to …2017/12/222017-12-22 07:00:15
My Short Story Collection, by Barry Lee Jones (0:42)Today we see that if you tell readers the story situation is boring, they just …2017/12/182017-12-18 07:00:38
Deadline, by Keith B Walters (1:18)Today we see that some kinds of errors can convince readers that your book is …2017/12/112017-12-11 10:38:37
Amber Fang, Book 2: Betrayal, by Arthur Slade (40:00)Today we see that playing to your protagonist’s strengths can inspire an engaging start. What …2017/12/082017-12-08 07:00:55
Who Likes Short Shorts? by Peter Sortwell (40:00)Today we see that deft writing can overcome a few distracting glitches. What I gleaned …2017/12/042017-12-04 07:00:06
Evenings with Littleberry and Other Short Stories, by A.S. Morrison (1:28)Today we see that if an error is famous enough to have a well-known name, …2017/11/272017-11-27 07:00:52
Lily Marin: three short steampunk stories, by Paul Kater (1:21)Today we see that focusing on minutia can damage the reader’s trust as much as …2017/11/202017-11-20 07:00:31
The Fall, by M.J. McGriff (3:11)Today we see that if the reader can’t get a stable sense of where they …2017/11/152017-11-15 07:00:40
Comedy Shorts: Four Short Stories….., by Robin Storey (2:30)Today we see that commas are not the only punctuation that can get repetitive. What …2017/11/132017-11-13 07:00:21
Toils and Snares, by Robert L. Slater (27:08)Today we see that civilization is fleeting and fragile. What I gleaned about the story: …2017/11/082017-11-08 07:00:41
Inner Mind/Outer Space: Four Short Stories and a Novelette by the Author of Alien Within, by Karen Forrester (0:53)Today we see that if you echo a well-known phrase, you should either match it …2017/11/062017-11-06 07:00:20
A Conspiracy of Shadows, by Randy Nargi (2:35)Today we see that creating cognitive dissonance for the reader is a great way to …2017/11/012017-11-01 07:00:20
Short Stories Part 1., by L.L. Caulton (1:16)Today we see that issues common to one point-of-view are equally distracting when they occur …2017/10/302017-10-30 07:00:45
Angels in the Moonlight, by Caimh McDonnell (40:00)Today we see that humor and danger make a good team. What I gleaned about …2017/10/272017-10-27 08:16:33
Criminalities: Three Short Crime Stories and an Essay, by Barry Ergang (1:42)Today we see that if reading your first sentence feels like being nailed by a …2017/10/232017-10-23 07:00:26
The Great Turning, by Lesli Richardson (5:15)Today we see that a page of mundane travel details is a risky way to …2017/10/182017-10-18 07:00:03
Everblossom: A Short Story and Poetry Anthology, by Larissa Hinton (2:37)Today we see that the road to pronouns must be paved with concrete. What I …2017/10/162017-10-16 07:00:21
Rise of the Overlord, by Kevin Potter (3:26)Today we see that when the conditions of a prophecy are completely under the characters’ …2017/10/112017-10-11 07:00:02
Short Stories: Volume 1, by Liam Mor (1:10)Today we see that if your formatting makes reading the page feel like wading through …2017/10/102017-10-10 10:41:15
Kissed by Literature, by Jordan Elizabeth (40:00)Today’s survivor shows us that the best twist endings come as a surprise AND are …2017/10/022017-10-02 07:00:22
God and the Saber-Toothed Tiger and other stories, by Ed Weiss (1:21)Today we see that readers are looking for your stories; not your “awesome guy achievement …2017/09/252017-09-25 12:50:36
Zombie Zeitgeist, by J Cornell Michel (1:15)Today we see that starting in the middle of the action shouldn’t mean chopping off …2017/09/182017-09-18 07:00:13
Broken Wizards, by Jeffrey Bardwell (4:55)Today we see that inadequate editing is the fastest way to derail the immersion train. …2017/09/132017-09-13 07:00:15
A Very Short Collection of Shorts, by Rebecca Welch (1:15)Today we see that stereotypes can work against you. What I gleaned about the stories: …2017/09/112017-09-11 07:00:11
Toby Smart, by Aaron D. Phillips (1:16)Today we see that punctuation conventions matter, and if you invent your own, readers will …2017/09/082017-09-08 07:00:39
Short Stories of the Days to Come, by Kenny Yao and Kevin Yao (0:40)Today we see several ways to erode a reader’s confidence before they even reach page …2017/09/042017-09-04 07:00:53
Squawk of the Were-Chicken, by Richard J. Kendrick (40:00)Today we see that when your opening image is of an egg harvester invention launching …2017/09/012017-09-01 07:00:19
Trio: Three Short Stories, by Danielle de Valera (1:00)Today we see that if syntax out of order your is, readers will assume either …2017/08/282017-08-28 07:00:32
Waiter! There’s a Clue in My Soup, by Camille Leguire (40:00)Today we see that readers are more likely to accept a large bundle of facts …2017/08/212017-08-21 07:00:17
Momentary Stasis, by P.R. Adams (40:00)Today we see that when you set your story in the distant future, readers will …2017/08/162017-08-16 07:00:48
Short Stories for Short on Time People, by David Santos Solano (0:37)Today we see several writing styles that strip emotional impact from the prose. What I …2017/08/142017-08-14 07:00:05
The Watch (The Red Series Book 1), by Amanda Witt (19:58)Today we see that it’s important to establish your narrator’s perspective early on, or risk …2017/08/092017-08-09 06:53:47
Owned, by Jess C Scott (3:41)Today we see that you can deviate from any rule of usage if you give …2017/07/312017-07-31 07:00:52
The Prince of Ravens, by Hal Emerson (40:00)Today we see that earning a reader’s trust is crucial. What I gleaned about the …2017/07/282017-07-28 08:35:58
Short Stories of the Twenty-first Century, by Prescott Fry (1:14)Today we see that if readers have been primed to expect exuberant and flowery prose, …2017/07/242017-07-24 07:00:58
Three Short Fairytales, by G. Wulfing (1:03)Today we see that sometimes, it isn’t the narrator who seems unreliable; it’s the author. …2017/07/242017-07-24 07:00:23
Forge of the Jadugar, by Russ Linton (38:56)Today we see that when a reader picks up a series in the middle, it …2017/07/192017-07-19 07:00:45
The Plan and other short stories, by Stephen Brandon (1:32)Today we see that if something in your fiction causes a reader to recheck the …2017/07/172017-07-17 09:16:57
A Light Rises in a Dark World, by M. D. Boncher (4:20)Today we see that attempting to pre-empt criticism can sometimes just put readers on guard. …2017/07/122017-07-12 08:12:27
Ghost Stories, by Ron Ripley (1:33)Today we see that telling readers something they can easily work out on their own …2017/07/102017-07-10 07:00:59
Heaven’s Jubilee And Other Short Stories, by Faith Blum (1:10)Today we see that readers will assume obvious differences are significant. What I gleaned about …2017/07/072017-07-07 07:00:07
The Darwin Protocol, by William Oday (9:54)Today we see that even evil conspirators need proper motivations for their evil conspiring. What …2017/06/282017-06-28 07:00:00
Short Stories and Flash Fiction, by Alice de Sturler (0:46)Today we see that if the technical side of your ebook isn’t smooth enough to …2017/06/262017-06-26 07:00:23
Walking: Five Short Stories from the Sands, by W.G. White (4:58)Today we see that establishing a world where things are clearly different doesn’t mean readers …2017/06/192017-06-19 07:00:26
Less than Noble, by J.M. Riou (40:00)When a book’s opening gives the reader pause, the clock is already ticking. At that …2017/06/142017-06-14 07:00:26
Strange Stories And Novellas, by Jillian Kulp (0:56)Today we see that, while a spellchecker is no substitute for an editor, readers will …2017/06/122017-06-12 07:00:11
Lonely Out in Space: A Collection of Sci-Fi and Fantasy Short Stories, by M.R. Holman (0:47)Today we see that finding a formatting issue within another distraction makes both issues even more …2017/06/052017-06-05 07:00:10
Short, Sharp Shocks: A Collection of Hit ‘n’ Run Fiction, by Simon Wood (2:03)Today we see that editorial issues with the title of your book signal trouble ahead. What I …2017/05/292017-05-29 07:00:03
Sonoran Dreams: Three Short Stories from Exile, by Robb Grindstaff (2:33)Today we see that lists of things are supposed to be easy to read. What …2017/05/222017-05-22 07:00:07
The Dark of Light, by Audrey Sharpe (7:47)Today we see that it’s hard to feed your reader worldbuilding porridge while a giant chocolate …2017/05/172017-05-17 07:00:53
Blood and Beauty and Other Weird Tales, by Jeff Chapman (2:14)Today we see that if you don’t tell readers who your protagonist is, they will …2017/05/152017-05-15 12:08:43
The Fire Mages, by Pauline M. Ross (29:29)Today a young girl takes us on a whirlwind journey to her heart’s desire, but …2017/05/102017-05-10 09:40:01
Discordia: Short Stories from The Golden Apple of Discord, by Lauren Hodge (0:51)Today we see that an overly stylized narrative voice can push readers away rather than drawing …2017/05/082017-05-08 09:04:03
The Day That Never Comes, by Caimh McDonnell (40:00)Today we see that the flashforward is more like a blaster than a lightsaber: not …2017/05/032017-05-03 07:00:52
Loose Threads: A Short Story Collection, by Luis Filipe Alves (2:30)Today we see that being translated from another language doesn’t make your book’s errors less …2017/05/012017-05-01 07:00:25
The Grey Bastards, by Jonathan French (40:00)Today we see that names giveth and names taketh away. What I gleaned about the …2017/04/272017-04-27 15:08:07
Defragmenting Daniel, by Jason Werbeloff (21:13)Today we see that an intriguing premise can blunt the impact of technical problems. We also see …2017/04/262017-04-26 07:00:18
No Way Out and other scary stories, by MJA Ware (2:47)Today we see that an incomplete or inconsistent ebook feature may be worse than not offering it at …2017/04/242017-04-24 07:00:46
Girl Fights Back, by Jacques Antoine (6:25)Today we see that when your protagonist gets too pushy, your readers’ suspension of disbelief …2017/04/192017-04-19 07:00:05
A Moonlit Task, by Tom Hansen (11:49)Today we see that some low-level irritants eventually fade into the background, while others only …2017/04/122017-04-12 07:00:07
Junk and Other Short Stories, by Duncan James (1:12)Today we see that a change in format conveys meaning; and if it doesn’t convey something about …2017/04/102017-04-10 07:00:42
Made in the Image of the Goddess, by Chantelle Griffin (2:41)Today we see that low-level grammar and punctuation errors can kick the reader out of …2017/04/072017-04-07 07:00:52
She Dreams of Lonely Stars, by LW Patricks (1:37)Today we learn that some readers actually read your legal page, and they find mistakes …2017/04/032017-04-03 08:12:20
Dark Matter: Short Stories and Poems, by Rose Perez (1:46)Today we see that stories without emotional content are clad in immersion-proof armor. What I gleaned …2017/04/032017-04-03 07:00:09
Millersville, by Brendan Detzner (1:57)Today we see that proper manuscript editing is not optional. What I gleaned about the …2017/03/312017-03-31 07:00:58
Darkin: A History of Blade and Light, by Joseph A. Turkot (1:23)Today we see that readers expect prose style to be consistent. What I gleaned about …2017/03/272017-03-27 07:00:43
Teeth of the Gods, by Sarah L. Wilson (6:53)Today we examine one of the recipes for melodrama. What I gleaned about the story: …2017/03/242017-03-24 09:23:56
Resistance (Divided Elements #1), by Mikhaeyla Kopievsky (7:39)Today we see that a writing style that draws attention to itself can be a …2017/03/222017-03-22 07:00:20
A Threat of Shadows, by JA Andrews (A minority report)Today we see that not all readers respond the same way to a given story. Note …2017/03/152017-03-15 07:00:36
Crimson Night and Other Short Stories, by Jaron Camp (1:12)Today we see that a typographical error can trick the reader into expecting a different …2017/03/132017-03-13 08:59:01
The Mundane Collective, by TB Löklund (9:32)Today we see that promising characters and conflicts sometimes struggle to be seen behind cluttered prose. What …2017/03/012017-03-01 07:00:05
Dark Corners, by Kelsi Summers (1:30)Today we see that even if readers don’t know the relevant rules, awkward nuances can still be …2017/02/272017-02-27 07:00:52
A Threat of Shadows, by JA Andrews (13:26)Today we see that Fantasy Capitalization Syndrome can ruin a good story. What I gleaned …2017/02/242017-02-24 11:23:30
Cheer Up, Jimmy: 3 Melancholy Short Stories, by Dania Sonin (1:31)Today we see that the first page is like a first date: your grooming counts. What …2017/02/202017-02-20 07:00:52
Book Simulator, by Chris Yee (40:00)Today we learn the art of the long con. And we’re thoroughly delighted to be …2017/02/172017-02-17 10:10:37
Cosmic Seasoning: A collection of short stories by L. G. Keltner (2:32)Today we see that if you tell readers they might not like your work, they may …2017/02/132017-02-13 07:00:33
The Chained Adept, by Karen Myers (4:50)Today we learn that it’s hard to engage with a story when the narrator won’t …2017/02/082017-02-08 07:00:06
Black Cat Tales: Black Anne and Other Short Stories, by Andy Morris (0:56)Today we see that if your first paragraph loses the reader, the rest don’t matter. …2017/02/062017-02-06 07:00:34
Rite of Rejection, by Sarah Negovetich (40:00)Today’s survivor teaches us that treating readers as intelligent collaborators is good for everybody. What …2017/02/012017-02-01 07:00:29
Selected Short Stories featuring Analog Memory, by Nicolas Wilson (1:59)Today we see that some aspects of real human conversation, when rendered in fiction, make the story …2017/01/302017-01-30 07:00:30
The Eagle’s Flight, by Daniel E. Olesen (26:57)Today we see that good prose needs an assist from narrative action. What I gleaned …2017/01/252017-01-25 07:00:52
8 Short Stories, by Floyd Looney (1:30)Today we see that shifting between temporal tenses is fraught with peril and must be …2017/01/232017-01-23 07:00:19
Clutch: Book One of The Wrecked Earth, by CEL Welsh (5:14)Today we see that opting for a “big-picture history” prologue is like attempting a triple-lutz …2017/01/202017-01-20 07:00:34
Colossus, by Jette Harris (6:26)Today we see that one disruption of immersion can be the cause of more disruptions later. What …2017/01/182017-01-18 07:00:16
From a Foreign Shore, by Andrew Knighton (40:00)Hey, gang! Another survivor! This one shows us that when it comes to alternate histories, …2017/01/162017-01-16 07:00:36
Lament of the Fallen, by Andy Peloquin (33:08)Today we see that a book can start strong, but stumble when it tries to …2017/01/132017-01-13 07:00:30
The Space Between, by Scott J. Robinson (33:30)Today we see that major story motives have to be convincing or readers won’t buy …2017/01/112017-01-11 07:00:22
The Drifter: and other short stories, by Robert Scott-Norton (17:34)Today we see that invented or foreign prose that is close to English needs to …2017/01/092017-01-09 07:00:50
White Rabbit Society, by Brendan Detzner (3:59)Today we watch an intriguing story set in a magical house get derailed by distracting and unintended …2017/01/062017-01-06 07:00:16
The Weatherman, by Laurie Axinn Gienapp (10:14)Today we see that even if you’re trying to create a bit of mystery, some …2017/01/042017-01-04 07:00:48
Duty: Suspense and Mystery Stories from the Cold War and Beyond, by Martin Roy Hill (2:50)Today we see that strong emotional experiences should hold the narrator’s interest for more than an …2017/01/022017-01-02 07:00:56
A Man With One Of Those Faces, by Caimh McDonnell (40:00)Today we get a thoroughly enjoyable start, and the first pure mystery novel to survive …2016/12/232016-12-23 13:20:28
Cross Examinations: Crime in Columbus, by John Hegenberger (2:16)Today we see that description readers can trust is twice as important in a crime …2016/12/192016-12-19 08:00:35
Enchanting the King, by E.D. Walker (4:21)Today we see that when the visuals are in conflict, readers can get trapped trying …2016/12/142016-12-14 08:00:54
There Comes a Time, by J.J. Green (2:24)Today we are reminded that most people expect the near future to still have access …2016/12/122016-12-12 07:00:53
Invasion, by Sean Platt and Johnny B. Truant (40:00)Today we see another IOD survivor, and appropriately enough, it’s a story about survivors. But …2016/12/092016-12-09 07:00:57
Threw Lake and other short stories, by Les Bill Gates (3:15)Today we see that a single paragraph can unravel a page’s worth of reader interest. What …2016/12/052016-12-05 07:00:31
The Ring and the Flag, by William L. Hahn (7:21)Today we see that tiny issues may not bust immersion, but when they gather in sufficient …2016/12/022016-12-02 07:00:46
Grey Magic, by JT Lawrence (4:13)Today we see that if a reader cannot trust the typography, they will never relax fully enough …2016/11/302016-11-30 07:00:46
Three Mermaid Tales: Short Stories, by Anne Seaworthy (2:00)Today we see that the more conclusions you draw for a reader, the less interest they …2016/11/282016-11-28 10:38:58
Demoniac Dance, by Jaq D. Hawkins (3:26)Today we see that when you’re trying to set the hook, it’s better to tell …2016/11/232016-11-23 07:00:23
The Storm Fishers and Other Stories, by Everitt Foster (1:44)Today we see that tangled comparisons can bust immersion. What I gleaned about the stories: Contrary to …2016/11/212016-11-21 07:00:28
The Butterfly and the Sea Dragon, by Tyree Campbell (2:20)Today we see that a story has to move quickly and unerringly to establish the setting …2016/11/182016-11-18 07:00:24
Dymond’s World, by C.W. Crowe (12:06)Today we see that failing to meet the expectations of your genre audience can undermine the …2016/11/162016-11-16 07:00:56
Thirteen, by Jonny Newell (2:33)Today we see that changing the meaning of your punctuation in mid-sentence is a recipe for a shipwreck. …2016/11/142016-11-14 07:00:49
Muddy Mouth, by C.A. Newsome (9:08)Today we see that POV has a kind of momentum. What I gleaned about the …2016/11/112016-11-11 07:00:42
To Live is to Fight, by Amber Frost (0:52)Today we see that leaving out a key fact can produce a disruptively amusing image. …2016/11/072016-11-07 08:52:07
Hitler Out Of Time, by David Avoura King (1:43)Today we see a fun premise brought down by distracting prose. What I gleaned about …2016/11/042016-11-04 07:00:45
Greysuits, by Nathan Lee Green (15:44)Today we see that a good story needs more than just a sequence of plot …2016/11/022016-11-02 07:00:41
Journey Back to Mars, by Hugh Huesca (1:10)Today we see that if a reader loses trust in the prose on page one, …2016/10/312016-10-31 07:00:00
Deviants of Giftborn, by Zuri Amarcya (2:13)Today we see that too many details all at once can actually paint an incorrect image. What …2016/10/262016-10-26 07:00:11
Wanna Take a Ride?, by Gary Val Tenuta (2:42)Today we see that one case of misused punctuation can undermine the tone of your entire …2016/10/242016-10-24 07:00:52
Amber Fang, by Arthur Slade (40:00)Today brings us another winner! This time it’s a spunky vampire librarian assassin. What I …2016/10/212016-10-21 07:00:15
The Seal of Throkar, by Marniy Jones (6:43)Today we see that subtle word misuse can create unintended comical effects that break immersion. What …2016/10/182016-10-18 20:43:26
Mage Slave, by R.K. Thorne (3:50)Today we see that pronouns are like pit bulls. What I gleaned about the story: …2016/10/142016-10-14 07:00:08
Viridian System Sampler: Eight Short Stories, by Jemima Pett (5:55)Today we see that the speech patterns of non-native speakers should either be close enough …2016/10/102016-10-10 11:44:31
Fools’ Apocalypse, by Anderson Atlas (4:56)Today we examine an effect I’m going to call “evasive narrating” in which the narrator appears …2016/10/072016-10-07 07:00:38
Sebasten of Atlantis and the Forgotten Goddess, by Olivier Delaye (7:58)Today we define dumping as exposition given before it is needed. What I gleaned about …2016/10/052016-10-05 07:00:29
Get Out of My Head: Ninth Anniversary Edition, by William Coker (2:02)Today we see that ebooks converted from print really do require different considerations. What I gleaned …2016/10/032016-10-03 07:00:04
A Heretical Divide, by Serban Valentin Constantin Enache (6:47)Today we see another story with a strong sense of character brought down by a …2016/09/302016-09-30 07:00:16
A Curse Upon the Saints, by J. Rutger Madison (12:15)Today we examine the impact of speech attribution on scene choreography. What I gleaned about the story: …2016/09/282016-09-28 07:00:50
The Dark Verse, Vol 1: From the Passages of Revenants by M Amanuensis Sharkchild (1:47)Today we see that a precious or arch narrative style is like a fresh razor; …2016/09/262016-09-26 07:00:04
Why You Were Taken, by J.T. Lawrence (3:21)Today we see that talking directly to the reader immediately breaks the immersive spell. What I …2016/09/232016-09-23 07:00:31
Campaign 2100: Game of Scorpions, by Larry Hodges (4:13)Today we see that the metaphor of your title should be a long, slow burn. …2016/09/212016-09-21 07:00:42
Stories, by Samie Foster (0:46)Today we see that, as a publisher, you need to make sure that your book is …2016/09/192016-09-19 07:00:21
More Than Monsters, by J.M. Riou (16:33)Today we see that if an author can’t handle common verb tenses, even a strong …2016/09/162016-09-16 11:10:34
Awakening, by Katherine Wynter (9:45)Today we see there’s a hierarchy of intrusiveness when it comes to typos. What I gleaned …2016/09/142016-09-14 09:52:52
Star Crash: A Space Anthology by Vera Loy (2:13)Today we see that if you tell a reader something they have already assumed, it …2016/09/122016-09-12 07:00:11
The Tilt, by M.A. Robbins (17:04)Today we see that when characters experience facts but have no emotional reaction to them, …2016/09/092016-09-09 07:00:13
The Rat Collector, by Chris Yee (6:21)Today I am reminded that when the problem is a stylistic one, examples can recur …2016/09/072016-09-07 07:00:48
Short Stories, Crimes, Cults and Curious Cats, by Jonathan Day (2:40)Today we see that tripping over things a proofreader should have caught shakes a reader’s faith in the …2016/09/052016-09-05 07:00:48
Upriver, Downriver, by Aaron Ward (4:53)Today we are reminded that the job of narrator is a sacred trust. Betray that trust and he’ll …2016/09/022016-09-02 07:00:46
My Delicate Destruction, by Jillian Ashe (11:25)In today’s episode we see that when the viewpoint isn’t nailed down securely, people die. …2016/08/312016-08-31 07:00:10
Rejects From The Idea Factory; A Flash Fiction Anthology, By Ray Daley (1:37)Today we see that sometimes you can judge a book by its cover. What I …2016/08/292016-08-29 07:00:06
Human Again, by Moran Chaim (3:08)Today we see an example of nuanced prose where the nuances feel wrong. What I gleaned about …2016/08/262016-08-26 07:00:20
Pantheon, by Scott Beckman (10:00)Today we see that every sentence in a story needs to have a reason for …2016/08/242016-08-24 07:00:47
While the Black Stars Burn, by Lucy A. Snyder (40:00)Today we see that if two stories are in the same collection, readers will carry …2016/08/222016-08-22 07:00:29
Cannibal Hearts, by Misha Burnett (33:09)Today we see that even when the reader is fully engaged and loving the story, …2016/08/192016-08-19 07:00:45
Endgame, by Susan Kelly (4:40)Today we see a writing tic that will convince your readers you think they’re morons. …2016/08/172016-08-17 07:00:38
Pushing up the Digits, by Pascal Inard (8:12)Today we see that with an unknown publisher/author, variations in formatting come across as inexperience …2016/08/152016-08-15 07:00:12
A Facet for the Gem, by C.L. Murray (11:00)Today we see that a fight needs to be choreographed logically and conveyed clearly, or readers …2016/08/122016-08-12 07:00:20
Colony One, by E.M. Peters (3:58)Today we see that exposition about the politics of a place is uninteresting if we …2016/08/102016-08-10 07:00:45
Life in a Grain of Sand, by Geoff Le Pard (1:59)Today we see that the comma, the lightest of punctuation, can have the heaviest impact …2016/08/082016-08-08 07:00:55
Cold Reboot, by Michael Coorlim (18:15)Today we see that once a reader has formed an impression of what’s going on, they …2016/08/052016-08-05 07:00:15
Get On Board Little Children, by Victoria Randall (4:05)Today we see that any conversation beginning with “You already know this…” is heading for the rocks. …2016/08/032016-08-03 07:00:10
Forgive Me, Bloody Hell And Other Stories, by Steven Soul (1:19)Today we see that readers expect a story to be about the significance of events …2016/08/012016-08-01 07:00:36
Pandora Red, by Jay Tinsiano (3:55)Today we see that presenting information by having your protagonist think about it does not turn …2016/07/292016-07-29 07:00:38
The Aeronaut, by Bryan Young (3:27)Today we see that any unbelievable thing can happen in a story, so long as …2016/07/272016-07-27 07:00:49
Flash! Vol 1, by Brady Koch (2:13)Today we see that giving flavoursome detail before defining qualities is gambling that the reader …2016/07/252016-07-25 07:00:15
Hungry Gods, by J.D. Brink (8:56)Today we see that a casual reference to a common human experience that is not …2016/07/212016-07-21 07:00:09
The Cartel, by E G Manetti (3:49)Today we see that the right to tell backstory has to be earned, by first …2016/07/202016-07-20 07:00:57
Fantastic Visions 2, by Julian M Miles (2:50)Today we see that contradictions can damage immersion more easily than strong images can create …2016/07/182016-07-18 07:00:18
Finished With Life But Unable To Die, by Scott Bartlett (8:05)Today we discuss the promise that every story has to make. And what happens when it …2016/07/152016-07-15 07:00:47
Rider’s Revenge, by Alessandra Clarke (6:18)Today we see that paragraph breaks are like commas, and that having too many of …2016/07/132016-07-13 07:00:01
Earth and Other Small Things, by Daniel Masterson (3:42)Today we see that readers expect narrative voice to be both consistent and emotive. What …2016/07/112016-07-11 07:00:15
Architects of Destiny, by Amy DuBoff (6:45)Today we explore why a word choice with the wrong connotation can cripple a scene. What …2016/07/082016-07-08 07:00:19
Salvage Trouble, by J.S. Morin (40:00)Today we see that sometimes, the limitations of physics present an opportunity to be awesome. …2016/07/062016-07-06 11:27:03
Aurelia: six ghost stories, by David Bramhall (0:56)Today we see that immersion needs more than a series of statements connected together.  What …2016/07/042016-07-04 07:00:43
The Path of Flames, by Phil Tucker (40:00)Today we see that another way to grab readers is not with action, but with the imminent …2016/06/292016-06-29 07:00:30
Engraved on the Eye, by Saladin Ahmed (40:00)Today we see that an established author can work just fine without the safety net of …2016/06/272016-06-27 07:00:05
Trophies, by J. Gunnar Grey (12:22)Today we see that deviating from publishing conventions can create unintended problems for the reader. What …2016/06/242016-06-24 08:56:30
Along For The Ride, by Martin Alvarez (2:35)Today we see that stories need a firm framework of description. What I gleaned about …2016/06/202016-06-20 07:00:50
Unleashed, by Dirk Patton (16:49)Today we see that when the narrator’s thoughts are cold and distant, it’s hard for a reader …2016/06/172016-06-17 07:00:09
Broken People, by Ioana Visan (3:24)Today we see that if your silhouettes have neither backlighting nor total shadow, you might not …2016/06/152016-06-15 07:00:16
Dancing and Other Stories, by Harriet Steel (2:14)Today we see that mistakes on the first page of a story can push a …2016/06/132016-06-13 07:00:28
Magic Unbound, by Jill Nojack (3:43)Just as exposition dumping is a bad way to present backstory, today we see that it …2016/06/102016-06-10 07:00:50
Call Me Yesterday, by Tim Beresford (3:40)Today we see that seven of nine can either be sexy or frustrating, depending on …2016/06/082016-06-08 07:00:37
Itch: Nine Tales of Fantastic Worlds, by Kris Austen Radcliffe (1:53)Today we see that even if a scene is well-written, it won’t engage readers if …2016/06/062016-06-06 07:00:56
Wrong Side of Hell, by Sonya Bateman (5:25)Today we see that if a prologue can be replaced with 5 words of exposition, it probably …2016/06/032016-06-03 07:00:23
Community 17, by James Cardona (3:20)Today we see that conflicted imagery weaves impenetrable armor against immersion. What I gleaned about …2016/06/012016-06-01 07:00:36
Tra-Con-Per-Ski!, by HM Reynolds (6:46)Today we see that if you reduce characters to a pronoun rather than giving them …2016/05/302016-05-30 07:00:46
Second Skyn, by Damien Boyes (40:00)Today we see that a compelling premise, revealed quickly, can suck readers right down the …2016/05/272016-05-27 07:00:09
In Strange Worlds, by Brenda Cheers (6:15)Today we learn a great way to ensure your readers do not invest emotionally in your …2016/05/252016-05-25 07:00:40
Autumn Harvest, by Mark Kasniak (0:53)Today we see just how quickly a reader can bounce out of your book and …2016/05/232016-05-23 07:00:25
Recovered, by Amber Polo (6:01)Today we see that there’s more to telling a story than just stringing together a sequence …2016/05/182016-05-18 07:00:51
Ten Orbits of the Sun, by David Milligan-Croft (4:58)Today we see that a single mistake can overwhelm good prose if the mistake is …2016/05/162016-05-16 07:00:07
A Secondhand Life, by Pamela Crane (2:16)Today we are reminded that trying to sound writerly is not the point of writing. …2016/05/132016-05-13 07:00:23
The Colossus, by Ranjini Iyer (5:10)Today we see that physical movements are eye-candy for the visual cortex, but that the …2016/05/112016-05-11 07:00:27
The Odyssey of Hans Kessler, by Brad L. Smith (1:19)Today we see that if you call attention to an action or detail that readers would …2016/05/092016-05-09 07:00:55
Loss of Reason, by Miles A. Maxwell (8:15)Today we see that if you aren’t sure who’s telling the story and why, readers …2016/05/062016-05-06 07:00:12
The Enigma Strain, by Nick Thacker (14:30)Today we meet a problem that I call the flashmob of disbelief. What I gleaned about …2016/05/042016-05-04 07:00:54
Monsters & Demons, by Brian Rella (1:33)Today we see that if your first paragraph throws up a barrier, readers might not …2016/05/022016-05-02 07:00:18
Daddy Soda, by Mira Gibson (3:08)Today we meet the Frankensentence. What I gleaned about the story: Candice has been run …2016/04/292016-04-29 07:00:57
On Lucky Shores, by Kerry J. Donovan (25:47)Today’s story reminds us that action may distract readers from minor prose problems for a …2016/04/272016-04-27 07:00:18
Honest Fibs, by Nicholas C. Rossis (40:00)Today we see that every time a reader needs to unravel the formatting, immersion falters. …2016/04/252016-04-25 07:00:06
Anonymous, by Christine Benedict (1:54)Today we are reminded that beta readers are no replacement for a good editor. What …2016/04/222016-04-22 10:37:42
Asylum – 13 Tales of Terror by Matt Drabble (1:11)Today we see that combining two things that damage immersion only damages immersion faster. What …2016/04/182016-04-18 07:00:44
Patchwork Man, by D.B. Martin (40:00)Today we see that a story does not have to be exciting in order to …2016/04/152016-04-15 07:00:43
The Galapagos Incident, by Felix R. Savage (28:50)Today we see that if you tell us FTL comms are not possible, you should …2016/04/132016-04-13 07:00:56
Blood Moon 2, by Cody Toye (2:01)Today we see that with adjectives, more is not merrier. What I gleaned about the stories: …2016/04/112016-04-11 07:00:52
My Tomorrow Your Yesterday, by Jason Ayres (10:35)Today we see that if all your narrator can talk about is himself and the litany …2016/04/082016-04-08 07:00:21
The Viper and the Urchin, by Celine Jeanjean (3:35)Today we see that if a character claims elegance, the prose with which he does so …2016/04/062016-04-06 07:00:07
Facets of Fantasy, by Arthur Hall (2:52)Today we see that robots make ghastly layout artists. What I gleaned about the stories: …2016/04/042016-04-04 07:00:49
The Natural Order, by R.J. Vickers (13:20)Today we see that if your pacing is glacially slow at the beginning, you might …2016/04/012016-04-01 07:00:40
Into Autumn, by Larry Landgraf (2:40)On very rare occasions, a book will defy common publishing practices for brilliant effect. This …2016/03/302016-03-30 07:00:56
The Uncanny Valley: Tales from a Lost Town, by Gregory Miller (3:46)Today we see that inconsistent punctuation can be just as jarring as inaccurate punctuation. What …2016/03/282016-03-28 07:00:37
We, The Watched, by Adam Bender (5:14)Today we see that whatever the POV character is experiencing, he should get on with …2016/03/252016-03-25 07:00:05
Broken World, by Kate L. Mary (14:30)Today we see that poor character decisions are a quick way to alienate readers. What I …2016/03/232016-03-23 07:00:12
Robots Vs. Fake Robots: And Other One Act Plays, by David Largman Murray (7:18)Today we see that a story doesn’t have to be conventional to hold a reader’s interest; …2016/03/212016-03-21 07:00:42
Strawman Made Steel, by Brett Adams (15:57)Today we see that drama and a strong character can overshadow a recurring problem, but …2016/03/182016-03-18 07:00:23
Rated R: Kill Team One, by Mike Leon (11:02)Today we see that narrating a movie-watching experience is a lot trickier than it sounds. What I …2016/03/162016-03-16 07:00:03
The Dark and Shadowy Places, by Caitlin McColl (2:27)Today we see that poorly balanced clauses trip the reader and make otherwise minor issues more …2016/03/142016-03-14 07:00:32
The Lust for Blood, by Charmain Marie Mitchell (2:05)Today we see that even deliberate echoing can be distracting if the surrounding prose doesn’t support …2016/03/112016-03-11 08:01:54
Juma’s Rain, by Katharina Gerlach (6:19)Today we see that when the prose lacks nuance, it amplifies other problems. What I …2016/03/092016-03-09 07:00:43
Poisoned Apples, by James Loscombe (1:36)Today we see that if you move from a colloquial voice to the absurd or …2016/03/072016-03-07 10:07:55
One Kill Away, by Alex MacLean (15:32)Today we see that the rhythm of narration needs punctuation, just as sentences do. What …2016/03/042016-03-04 07:00:49
Age of Torridan, by Kai Herbertz (7:52)Today we see that a good story immerses not just with plot and themes, but with …2016/03/022016-03-02 07:00:58
Glass Within Glass: Three End of the World Stories, by Nathan Kuzack (1:24)Today we see that awkward prose can come in many forms. And many places in the book, …2016/02/292016-02-29 12:36:44
Allies & Enemies, by Cheryl S. Mackey (2:51)Today we are reminded how important it is for authors to actually visualize the scenes …2016/02/262016-02-26 07:00:50
Imminent Danger And How to Fly Straight into It, by Michelle Proulx (7:07)Today we see that if the little details don’t agree, readers will be distracted from …2016/02/242016-02-24 07:00:19
Threesome: Three Dark and Twisted Tales, by Jacky Cowper (1:47)Today we see that if there is an error on page one, then readers will …2016/02/222016-02-22 07:00:34
The Last Incarnation, by J.A. Giunta (15:56)Today we see that some aspects of typography are not optional, and without them, immersion …2016/02/192016-02-19 07:00:28
To Trust The Wolf, by Peter Birk (6:20)Today we see that if the author is reluctant to refer to characters by name, …2016/02/172016-02-17 07:00:22
Become Like a God: Short Science Fiction Mythologies, by McCamy Taylor (40:00)Today we see that a great story only holds the reader if they make it …2016/02/152016-02-15 07:00:22
Skeletal, by Katherine Hayton (27:41)Today we see that when repeated word patterns are persistent, immersion is impossible once you’ve …2016/02/122016-02-12 07:00:18
Awakened, by C. Steven Manley (5:45)Today we see how important it is to carefully manage the reader’s mental camera. What …2016/02/102016-02-10 07:00:47
Cold Pulp Trio, by E.R. White, Jr. (1:02)Today we see that authors lose credit faster for shaky description than they gain it …2016/02/082016-02-08 07:00:29
Groom of the Tyrannosaur Queen, by Daniel M. Bensen (16:50)Today we see a great premise weakened by a bit of sloppy spelling. What I …2016/02/052016-02-05 07:00:04
Cats and Other Tales, by Julia Underwood (5:26)Today we see that, if the narrator and characters don’t show emotion, readers won’t feel …2016/02/012016-02-01 07:00:08
Saving Hitler, by Ian James (2:06)Today we are reminded that narration needs to subtly manage the reader’s attention, but without being …2016/01/292016-01-29 07:00:04
Three Culture Shocks, by Tony Thorne (1:36)Today we see that if your prose doesn’t pull the reader deep, the smallest issue …2016/01/272016-01-27 07:00:36
Ignifer Tales, by Michael John Grist (2:16)Today we see that if you evoke a sense of immediate and visceral horror in …2016/01/252016-01-25 07:00:45
Three Tales for Christmas, by Steph Bennion (40:00)Today we see that if all the characters so far have obscure names from a …2016/01/212016-01-21 20:12:43
The Crown and the Mage, by Corinne Morier (3:34)Today we see that characters should not have information that the physics of their situation …2016/01/132016-01-13 07:00:02
The Vampire of Northanger, by Bryce Anderson (40:00)Today we see an example of a stylistic homage paid in brilliant coin. Jane Austen’s …2016/01/122016-01-12 07:00:58
Bodies Everywhere, by Barbara A Martin (1:49)Today we see that if a phrase is open to interpretation, prior paragraphs influence which …2016/01/112016-01-11 07:00:19
Strategy of Numbers, by Clint Irwin (6:04)Today we see the perils of having a strong opening line that is not borne …2016/01/082016-01-08 07:00:28
The Glass Beacon, by John Day (5:52)Today we are reminded that authors should never tell the reader how brilliant the hero …2016/01/062016-01-06 07:00:12
A Visit from the Soul-Eater, by Talisha Harrison (1:22)Today we see that if you don’t prime the reader to expect unusual usage or structure, when …2016/01/042016-01-04 10:31:04
Project Fifteen: Rain of Ash, by Rachel Judd (4:52)Today we see that small editorial issues can bring you to a halt if they …2016/01/012016-01-01 07:00:19
The Devil You Know, by Richard Levesque (40:00)Today we are reminded that when demons abound, a little debauchery and excess is just …2015/12/252015-12-25 07:00:39
Damage, by Stephen Shea (40:00)Today we see that dread does not come from a firehose. It trickles at us …2015/12/222015-12-22 13:00:30
Mysterious Darkness: Short Stories, by Melvin Rivers (1:08)Today we see that consigning a horrific event to less than a sentence creates a …2015/12/212015-12-21 07:00:17
No One’s Chosen, by Randall P. Fitzgerald (4:59)Today I am reminded that the more promising the story is, the more weak editing …2015/12/162015-12-16 07:00:40
White Liners: Hunter Rayne Highway Mystery Sketches, by RE McDonald (2:09)Today we see that having the reader trust your description is crucial if you are …2015/12/142015-12-14 07:00:43
Pilgrim of the Storm, by Russ Linton (40:00)Today we see that an alien scenario—or character—can take longer to orient the reader, but that doesn’t need …2015/12/112015-12-11 09:59:18
Grenheim’s Thorn, by Clay Lewisson (2:26)Today we see that when three or more characters are in a scene, some kind …2015/12/092015-12-09 07:00:15
The Living and the Dead, by Todd Travis (1:37)Today we see that self-publishers must be diligent in the entire book production process—not just …2015/12/072015-12-07 07:00:03
Winds of Aerathiea, by T.E. Adams (10:21)Today we see that when a plot hole shows up on page one, it can …2015/12/042015-12-04 07:00:27
Bartleby and James, by Michael Coorlim (40:00)Today we see that even a really engaging story can be tarnished by an insufficiency …2015/12/022015-12-02 07:00:00
Let the Water Rise and Other Stories, by Matthew Burgos (1:25)Today we see that if the opening sentences of your book are incoherent, readers will be …2015/11/302015-11-30 07:00:15
Death of a Hero, by C.B. Wright (16:22)Today we see that POV miscues can really rattle the immersion cage. What I gleaned …2015/11/272015-11-27 07:00:18
The Stolen Guardian, by R.A. Meenan (4:49)Today we are reminded that having characters explain things to a character who should already …2015/11/252015-11-25 07:00:42
Stellar Cloud, by Charity Bradford (3:59)Today we see that once a reader has lost trust in the author they are much …2015/11/232015-11-23 07:00:20
Catskinner’s Book, by Misha Burnett (40:00)Today we see that a reader captivated by a smooth opening is much more forgiving …2015/11/202015-11-20 07:00:25
Operation: Blackflag, by Richard J. Kendrick (12:38)Today I am reminded that when I have trouble taking the basic premise seriously, I …2015/11/182015-11-18 07:00:39
Dark Days, by Chris Harris (1:46)Today we see that ill-matched tenses confuse readers. What I gleaned about the stories: People …2015/11/162015-11-16 07:00:55
The Darkening Dream, by Andy Gavin (31:32)Today we see that even well-written stories can be vulnerable to pesky anachronisms. What I gleaned …2015/11/132015-11-13 07:00:20
Beyond the Plains, by Travis Bughi (9:08)Today we are reminded of the pitfalls of too much exposition without anything to draw the …2015/11/112015-11-11 07:00:05
Rogue Cosmos by Theo Taylor (3:11)Today we see that when the narrator suppresses relevant facts for no good reason, the reader …2015/11/092015-11-09 10:34:59
Running Into Time, by Douglas R. Black (5:03)Today we see that there’s an important distinction between a world in which people talk …2015/11/062015-11-06 07:00:06
Rarity from the Hollow, by Robert Eggleton (10:12)Today we see that adult topics in children’s dialogue can strain credibility, especially when the children …2015/11/042015-11-04 07:00:09
The Colour of Dishonour by Rayne Hall (40:00+)Today we see that readers might treat a single typographical error as an aberration if …2015/11/022015-11-02 07:00:42
Rust: Season One, by Christopher Ruz (40:00)Let the strumpets cry out as another contender crosses the line with arms raised! What I gleaned …2015/10/292015-10-29 07:00:00
Three Short Stories: A Journey Through Time, by Amy Wolf (2:12)Today we see that the technical aspects of an ebook are as important as the …2015/10/262015-10-26 07:00:44
The SHIVA Syndrome, by Alan Joshua (3:36)Today we see that an inconsistent narrative voice can quickly undermine the authenticity of the story being …2015/10/222015-10-22 07:00:00
Cringe-Expect The Holy: A Suspense Thriller Short Story Collection, by Damian Fredericks (2:05)Today we see that short-story collections can be more susceptible to character name confusion than …2015/10/192015-10-19 07:00:38
Foul is Fair, by Jeffrey Cook and Katherine Perkins (4:54)Today we learn that using a pronoun to refer to somebody who has not yet …2015/10/152015-10-15 07:00:17
A Sip of Fear, by Brian Rush (12:05)Today we see that when authors manufacture a convenient deduction, the result may feel convenient and …2015/10/082015-10-08 07:00:03
Somewhere to Turn: stories by Linda Courtland (27:53)Today we see that poor layout can hide good prose. What I gleaned about the …2015/10/052015-10-05 07:00:56
Malus Domestica, by S.A. Hunt (40:00)Today’s survivor shows us that spooking the reader works best if you first take the time to make …2015/10/022015-10-02 07:00:48
Cooper Omnibus by Bill Bernico (2:06)Today we see that it’s actually possible for first person narratives to lack intimacy if not …2015/09/282015-09-28 07:00:22
Brooding City, by Tom Shutt (7:17)Today we see that leaping to conclusions is not a sign of a good detective …2015/09/232015-09-23 07:00:18
Rotten Bodies, by Steve Jenkins (2:53)Today we see that a little italic emphasis goes a long way. What I gleaned about …2015/09/212015-09-21 07:00:59
Blade of the Destroyer, by Andy Peloquin (4:46)In today’s report we are reminded that if the author doesn’t properly establish the scene …2015/09/182015-09-18 07:00:11
Dark Matter, by Brett Adams (40:00)Today I am reminded that when the writing is really good, you find evidence of …2015/09/162015-09-16 07:00:42
Supernatural Fairytales by Dorlana Vann (2:57)Today we see that even inarticulate exhalations of emotion have rules of spelling. What I gleaned …2015/09/142015-09-14 07:00:47
Why Grandma Bought That Car by Anne R. Allen (8:32)Today we see that consistency is just as important as correctness. Maybe moreso. What I gleaned about the …2015/09/072015-09-07 07:00:13
Wings of the Sathakos, by Scott Beckman (8:34)Today we see that the reader will only tolerate so many digressions to backstory before …2015/09/042015-09-04 07:00:45
Slay Ride, a Christmas Miscellany by Simon Kewin (3:59)Today we see that without context, references to other works are either confusing, boring, or both. …2015/08/312015-08-31 08:52:52
The Girl at the End of the World, by Richard Levesque (40:00)With today’s IOD survivor, we see that sometimes, awesome comes in a misleading package. What I …2015/08/262015-08-26 07:00:44
Commitment and Other Tales of Madness by Glen Krisch (1:12)Today we see that if a story confuses a reader on the first page, they …2015/08/242015-08-24 07:00:42
Cthulhu Doesn’t Dance, by Justin MacCormack (3:06)Today we meet a book that claimed all the errors had been removed. Guess what happened. …2015/08/172015-08-17 07:00:41
Hidden Pictures by Angela Castillo (4:14)Today we see that partial echoes can be more distracting than full ones if the …2015/08/102015-08-10 07:00:15
Bells On Her Toes, by Diana J. Febry (7:23)Today we see that having the protagonist keep secrets even in their thoughts is not drama; it’s …2015/08/072015-08-07 07:00:23
Cold Sweats and Vignettes, by John Bowen (5:38)Today we see that not checking your invented words can result in readers doubting your …2015/08/032015-08-03 07:00:20
Dark Horse, by Jay Swanson (8:45)Today we see that inauspicious word choices can shatter the spell of immersion. What I …2015/07/292015-07-29 07:00:11
The Killing Fields: Short Stories, by Nikesh Murali (4:32)Today we see that the poor flow of text can overcome the draw of the …2015/07/272015-07-27 07:00:37
Witch’s Sacrifice, by Crissy Moss (3:20)Today we are reminded that authors must work carefully through their action sequences, or risk …2015/07/242015-07-24 07:00:38
Klondaeg Omnibus by Steve Thomas (4:25)Today we see that even if events are nonsensical, the descriptions must still make sense. …2015/07/222015-07-22 07:00:58
Fencing Reputation, by William L. Hahn (26:50)Today we see that no matter how engaging the story, if the same issue keeps …2015/07/172015-07-17 07:00:03
The Starfall Knight, by Ken Lim (8:10)Today we see that no matter how well drawn the world is, if the characters …2015/07/152015-07-15 07:00:05
By Sword Stave or Stylus – Andrew Knighton (40:00)Today we see that even a single mistake can push a reader out. What I …2015/07/132015-07-13 07:00:08
Cold Run, by Rachel A. Brune (3:54)Today we see that first-person tough guys are harder to write than you think. What …2015/07/102015-07-10 07:00:37
In A Right State, by Ben Ellis (19:33)Today we see that when an author disregards established story points, readers lose faith. Even if …2015/07/082015-07-08 07:00:52
Twisted Endings, by Timothy D McLendon (1:23)Today we see that when problems come close together, the reader is less likely to give the …2015/07/062015-07-06 07:00:30
The Shadow of the Gauntlet, by Casey Caracciolo (4:54)Today we see that unintended patterns in your prose are like squashed bugs on a window. What …2015/06/302015-06-30 07:00:34
Dr Ty’s Strange Fiction Volume 1, by Ty Walsh Trez (2:47)Today we see that adding something that most books don’t have can reduce the feeling …2015/06/292015-06-29 07:00:50
Stranger Worlds than These by L J Cohen (40:00)Today we see that less can be more when it comes to the speculative elements. …2015/06/222015-06-22 07:00:42
Mists of the Miskatonic, by Al Halsey (3:36)Today we see that without context, information can push the reader away rather than drawing …2015/06/152015-06-15 07:00:10
THIRTEEN: a collection of 13 dark tales, by Adam Hainline (12:28)Today we see that readers assume sentences are structured in a certain order, so changing …2015/06/082015-06-08 07:00:35
Digital Divide, by K.B. Spangler (13:30)Today we see that even when a reader wants an explanation, that’s still no license …2015/06/032015-06-03 07:00:51
And So May The Wonders Unfurl by Richard Simpson (1:03)Today we see that an odd layout can lose a reader as fast as a …2015/06/012015-06-01 07:00:43
Mina Cortez: From Bouquets to Bullets, by Jeffrey Cook (6:43)Today we see that flawed description of a scene’s physicality can destroy immersion. What I …2015/05/262015-05-26 07:00:08
What Looks Back by Zachary Adams (0:53)Today we see that the time saving of using find-and-replace can be a false economy. …2015/05/252015-05-25 07:00:45
A Wizard’s Gambit, by Ryan Toxopeus (5:52)Today we see that the choppy, frenetic prose of a battle scene is fertile ground …2015/05/212015-05-21 07:00:34
King Callie, by B. Lynch (7:37)Today we see that authors should report all significant changes in a character’s stance or position, to prevent seated …2015/05/192015-05-19 07:00:41
Empty Quiver: Tales from the Crimson Son Universe by Russ Linton (40:00)Today we see that even one error can overcome otherwise engaging stories. What I gleaned …2015/05/182015-05-18 07:00:07
The Park, by Voss Foster (21:13)Today we learn that if the reader cannot connect events to what has happened before, …2015/05/152015-05-15 07:00:13
Ours Is The Storm, by D Thourson Palmer (9:54)Today we see that when a mistake occurs regularly, it can sensitize the reader to seeing …2015/05/122015-05-12 08:12:17
The Disturbing Collection, by David J Skinner (1:44)Today we see that telling the reader what they are thinking only works if you …2015/05/112015-05-11 07:00:48
The Search for Cern, by F A Baker (1:36)Today we see that If the prose on the page doesn’t instill confidence, the quality of …2015/05/082015-05-08 07:00:06
Feyland: The Dark Realm, by Anthea Sharp (8:38)Today we see that if the reader doesn’t buy the protagonist’s plight, nothing can save …2015/05/052015-05-05 07:00:16
Bionic Punchline, by Damon L Wakes (12:04)Today we see that an error at the end of a section stands out just …2015/05/042015-05-04 07:00:36
Opal Eggs of Fire, by James Calderwood (4:38)Today we see that weak or inconsistent prose on the first page is likely to …2015/05/012015-05-01 07:00:12
Born to Magic, by David Wind (5:25)Today I realized that the typo-gremlin likes to strike when the reader is most vulnerable …2015/04/282015-04-28 07:00:43
Snapdragon: And Six More Stories with Bite by Jack Kardiac (4:21)Today we see that the best formatting is the kind the reader doesn’t notice. What I …2015/04/272015-04-27 07:00:43
Division: A Collection of Science Fiction Fairytales by Lee S Haw (9:13)Today we see that readers make almost immediate judgements, so the smallest confusion can fatally …2015/04/202015-04-20 07:00:59
Law of the Wolf, by S. A. Hunt (5:46)Today we see that sequel books have their own peculiar set of issues that can trip …2015/04/152015-04-15 07:00:09
Collection of Fear by Brendon Meynell (3:03)Today we see that if the text isn’t free of errors, readers will assume odd …2015/04/132015-04-13 07:00:51
1/2986, by A. Wendeberg (3:42)Today I realize that with some books, it’s hard to extract a new lesson to …2015/04/072015-04-07 07:00:19
Green Zulu 51 and Other Stories from the Vyptellian War by Scott Whitmore (13:15)Today we see that engaging plots and characters lose their power if readers don’t trust …2015/04/062015-04-06 07:00:39
Exodus, by Andreas Christensen (3:03)Today we see that the phrase “and then one day,” is a sure sign your …2015/04/032015-04-03 07:00:09
Days Gone Bad, by Eric R. Asher (3:21)Today we see that galloping I disease isn’t just about the narrator—other characters can trigger …2015/04/022015-04-02 07:00:19
The Group, by Kevin R. Doyle (9:30)Today we see that exposition about nameless, unspecified people doesn’t engage. What I gleaned about …2015/04/012015-04-01 07:00:53
Purenet, by HJ Lawson (5:32)Today we see that alternating between “I” and “I’ve” is not enough variety to break …2015/03/312015-03-31 07:00:43
Ghostoria by Tam Francis (8:16)Today we see that consistency of voice and tone is doubly important in a genre …2015/03/302015-03-30 07:00:56
The Upheaval, by Erica Stevens (8:45)Today I learned that when numerous unflaggable issues go by, it lowers my tolerance to …2015/03/272015-03-27 07:00:48
Operation Chimera, by Healey and Cox (9:23)Today we learn how to tell what an author thinks the scene is about. What I …2015/03/262015-03-26 07:00:16
Company Daughter, by Callan Primer (19:14)Today we see that the secret to creating worlds with character is to create characters …2015/03/252015-03-25 07:00:46
Cyberbully Blues, by Rubin Johnson (7:50)Today we see how distancing language can chill the tone of the scene and hold readers …2015/03/242015-03-24 07:00:52
Night Terrors by Valentine King (5:50)Today we see that considering how readers read is as important as word choice. What …2015/03/232015-03-23 07:00:25
The Tube Riders, by Chris Ward (4:41)Today we see that a moment’s inattention to continuity can undermine an otherwise engaging moment. …2015/03/202015-03-20 07:00:43
Hero for Hire, by C.B. Pratt (12:04)Today we see that when the narrator only states facts, there isn’t much to keep …2015/03/192015-03-19 07:00:44
Dark Space, by Jasper T. Scott (8:58)Today we see that plenty of science fiction fans don’t care about the credibility of the physics. …2015/03/172015-03-17 07:00:55
Legacy Code, by Autumn Kalquist (4:59)Today I begin to dig a bit deeper into what causes declarative sentence parades. What …2015/03/172015-03-17 07:00:19
Invasion of Privacy and other short stories, by Jim Liston (9:08)Today we see that however intellectually satisfying a reader finds a structure, if he has …2015/03/162015-03-16 07:00:11
Breaking News: ImmerseOrDie doing a StoryBundleI’m hijacking the IOD report stream to share this exciting announcement with everyone. This has been brewing since last …2015/03/132015-03-13 08:00:00
Last Flight for Craggy, by Gary Weston (3:11)Today I notice that a preoccupation with describing the physics of a scene can rob …2015/03/132015-03-13 07:00:42
Extensis Vitae, by Gregory Mattix (10:00)Today we see that if the narrator isn’t involved in the story he’s telling, the reader …2015/03/122015-03-12 07:00:19
Nano Contestant, by Leif Sterling (2:47)Today we see that unusual chapter breaks can throw readers off their stride. What I …2015/03/112015-03-11 07:00:46
Everflame, by Dylan Lee Peters (5:41)Today I am reminded that sometimes, even simple past tense can create problems. What I …2015/03/102015-03-10 07:00:48
Stirring The Grass and other stories, by David Winship (5:10)Today we see that prose that doesn’t fit the established style pushes the reader out …2015/03/092015-03-09 07:00:51
Shiftless, by Aimee Easterling (8:31)Today we see that if the narrative language does not feel natural to the context, …2015/03/062015-03-06 07:00:20
After: The Shock, by Scott Nicholson (38:03)Today we see that even with the goal-posts looming in sight, a short clump of …2015/03/052015-03-05 07:00:47
The Game, by Terry Schott (2:05)Today we see that when the editor is absent, the evidence mounts quickly. What I …2015/03/042015-03-04 07:00:32
Sworn to Raise, by Terah Edun (3:34)Today we see that when you repeat an entire phrase, it can actually insult your …2015/03/032015-03-03 07:00:10
Darkest Before The Dawn, by HM Reynolds (3:13)Today we see that punctuation is only visible when it goes wrong. What I gleaned …2015/03/022015-03-02 07:00:49
Frozen Prospects, by Dean Murray (40:00)Today we see that even with a penchant for echoing headwords, a good story can …2015/02/272015-02-27 07:00:33
Schism, by Laura Maisano (7:28)Today I learn that editing is like polish for a mirror. Without it, your gaze …2015/02/262015-02-26 07:00:04
Meadowcity, by Liz Delton (8:39)Today we see that there is more to scene description than reporting the physical facts. …2015/02/252015-02-25 07:00:57
Graveyard Shift, by Angela Roquet (1:37)Today we see that address modes matter. What I gleaned about the story: Lial Gordon …2015/02/242015-02-24 07:00:09
Thin Men, Paper Suits, by Tin Larrick (40:00)Today we see that a small error has a larger impact if it occurs at …2015/02/232015-02-23 07:00:47
Reader, by Erec Stebbins (7:24)Today we learn that profound insights cannot be faked. What I gleaned about the story: …2015/02/202015-02-20 07:00:13
Mind Me Milady, by Hicks and Rothman-Hicks (12:05)Today I learned that if your exposition changes the focus of the scene, that’s when it officially …2015/02/192015-02-19 07:00:23
Cold Hands, by Matt Perkins (29:42)Today we see that a strong story can hold a reader, even over the bumpy patches. …2015/02/182015-02-18 07:00:49
Call of the Kaiju, by E. Stuart Marlowe (8:17)Today I noted that when the narrative voice is passionless, the reader disengages. What I …2015/02/172015-02-17 07:00:48
The Zoey Chronicles, by Sophia Grey (2:01)Today we see that dense or figurative language increases the risk readers will lose immersion. …2015/02/162015-02-16 07:00:22
Infinity Squad, by Shuvom Ghose (5:05)Today we see that nobody believes in life after death—not really—until they’ve been there many times. …2015/02/132015-02-13 07:00:07
Daimones, by Massimo Marino (3:32)Today we see that if an author doesn’t speak English fluently, he should probably hire …2015/02/122015-02-12 07:00:22
Sanyare: The Last Descendant, by Megan Haskell (15:04)Today we see that even world situations that are totally acceptable can disrupt a story if …2015/02/112015-02-11 07:00:20
A Game of Greed and Deception, by John Mathews (7:42)Today I learned that a hiccup in the rhythm of the story can throw a …2015/02/102015-02-10 07:00:38
No Mercy, by Wendy Cartmell (3:17)Today we see that if your character misquotes a famous saying without comment, readers might think …2015/02/092015-02-09 07:00:18
Starf*cker, by Ian Thomas Healy (40:00)Today I learned that even a story from a genre I don’t particularly care for can survive …2015/02/062015-02-06 07:00:00
The Cestus Concern, by Mat Nastos (2:58)Today we see that head-hopping can sometimes happen, even if you don’t change heads. What …2015/02/052015-02-05 07:00:48
The Boy who Lit up the Sky, by J. Naomi Ay (9:40)Today I see that a strong scene concept is not enough to hold me in …2015/02/042015-02-04 07:00:30
Siege of Praetar, by David Kristoph (21:02)Today we see that some stories may be stronger than their editorial execution. What I gleaned about …2015/02/032015-02-03 07:00:36
Courtley’s Weird, Vol 1 by Christopher Courtley (6:28)Today we discover that a low-level of consistent issues increases the chance a reader will …2015/02/022015-02-02 07:00:54
Clovenhoof, by Goody and Grant (21:50)Today we see that even with lots going for it, little frictions can pull a …2015/01/302015-01-30 07:00:37
Cadman’s Gambit, by D.P. Prior (13:59)Today I learned that when the prologue confuses the reader, it isn’t doing its appointed …2015/01/292015-01-29 07:00:52
Conspiracy, by Ian Welch (6:28)Today we see that readers want to find something original on the first page. What …2015/01/282015-01-28 07:00:13
Darkness Creeps Forth, by Brian Greiner (4:15)Today we see that echoes do not need to be at the starts of sentences …2015/01/272015-01-27 07:00:38
The Circus Infinitus Stories Volume 1, by Ethan Sommerville (2:58)Today we discover that telling the reader something is unusual falls flat if you do …2015/01/262015-01-26 07:00:17
Wanderer’s Escape, by Simon Goodson (14:18)Today we see that a good story can be derailed by an unearned emotional beat. …2015/01/232015-01-23 07:00:49
Lady Catherine’s Diary, by Terry Greer (3:02)Today we see that trivial proofreading problems can derail an otherwise promising story. What I …2015/01/222015-01-22 07:00:33
Aristeia, by Wayne Basta (21:07)Today we see that a character can be believably expert at his job or he can be …2015/01/212015-01-21 07:00:37
Warchild: Pawn, by Ernie Lindsey (40:00)Today we get a doubly rare treat: another survivor, and this one has a female …2015/01/202015-01-20 07:00:18
The Archer Who Shot Down Suns, by Benjanun Sriduangkaew (6:02)Today we discover that readers are confused if two omniscient descriptions of the same event …2015/01/192015-01-19 07:00:16
Pariah’s Moon, by Ian Thomas Healy (2:13)Today we see that if not even the author can keep the details straight, the …2015/01/162015-01-16 07:00:36
After The Ending, by Fairleigh and Pogue (10:19)Today we see that some audiences crave the kinds of details that completely repel other readers. …2015/01/152015-01-15 07:00:01
A Patriot’s Betrayal, by Andrew Clawson (11:39)Today we see that even a good sentence structure can be problematic if it’s used …2015/01/142015-01-14 07:00:26
Quantum Tangle, by Chris Reher (31:23)Today we see a great story summarily executed by Chekhov’s gun. What I gleaned about …2015/01/132015-01-13 07:00:55
Twisted Rixter, by Gretchen Rix (40:00)Today we discover that demonstrating competence with obscure words makes the errors stand out more clearly. …2015/01/122015-01-12 07:00:27
Lodestone, by Wendy Scott (11:20)Today we see that even small clichés can erode confidence in the originality of the writing. …2015/01/092015-01-09 07:00:43
Ever Shade, by Alexia Purdy (6:35)Today we learn that making readers hate your protagonist is a non-optimal way to start the story. …2015/01/082015-01-08 07:00:53
Phrases of Light, by Richard J. Kendrick (10:23)Today we learn that if you want to hold things back to create mystery, you’d …2015/01/072015-01-07 07:00:04
The Star Thief, by Jamie Grey (7:44)Today we see that when the protagonist’s problems solve themselves, the story becomes pointless. What …2015/01/062015-01-06 07:00:12
Stories with Twists, by Larry Klos (3:46)Today we discover that while giving the reader a detailed enough picture of the scene …2015/01/052015-01-05 07:00:21
Adversaries Together, by Daniel Casey (2:24)Today we see that instead of painting a scene richly, over-frequent adjectives can drain the vital …2014/12/242014-12-24 07:00:33
The Winter Beast and other tales, by James R Sanford (9:46)Today we discover that readers expect the point of view to be a consistent retelling …2014/12/232014-12-23 07:00:27
Forged By Battle, by Patrick J. Loller (4:33)Today we learn that inconsistent typography can knock readers off the pace. What I gleaned about …2014/12/222014-12-22 07:00:00
Colt Coltrane and the Lotus Killer, by Allison M. Dickson (40:00)Today we learn that any story can be improved with robots. What I gleaned about …2014/12/192014-12-19 07:00:19
Queen of Roses, by Elizabeth McCoy (1:54)Today we realize that relying on pronouns to orient a scene involving a dozen characters …2014/12/182014-12-18 07:00:39
Nightblade, by Garrett Robinson (19:15)Today we discuss how villains who are easily duped undermine the dramatic tension of a …2014/12/172014-12-17 07:00:36
Salvation, by Lizzie Ashworth (7:31)Too much hinting at secret knowledge can make your protagonist sound like he’s wagging his tongue …2014/12/162014-12-16 07:00:29
Love Without Gun Control, by M Christian (10:51)Today we discover that less accessible prose makes readers less forgiving. What I gleaned about the …2014/12/152014-12-15 07:00:23
The Last Great Hero, by Scott J Robinson (9:24)Sometimes I feel cheated when the minor WTFs mount up and the rules say I …2014/12/122014-12-12 07:00:20
Eye of the Moonrat, by Trevor H. Cooley (8:31)It’s not enough that characters react believably to events in the story. They must also …2014/12/112014-12-11 07:00:10
The Emperor’s Daughter, by Richard Flunker (3:02)Today’s book shows us that some writers are completely deaf to echoing. What I gleaned …2014/12/102014-12-10 07:00:05
Supercenter, by Jason Rizos (5:15)Today we see that even if done for effect, a little bit of stylized voice goes a …2014/12/092014-12-09 07:00:04
Living the Afterlife, by River Fairchild (9:36)Today we discover that readers expect inconsistencies to be purposeful. What I gleaned about the …2014/12/082014-12-08 07:00:00
The Body Electric, by Beth Revis (18:54)Sometimes, good writing can overcome stylistic choices that the reader doesn’t normally enjoy. What I …2014/12/052014-12-05 07:00:43
Tresspassers, by Todd and Tim Wynn (10:00)If none of your characters feel anything about the events unfolding around them, neither will …2014/12/042014-12-04 07:00:43
Prospero’s Half-Life, by Trevor James Zaple (3:48)Sometimes, even correct grammar can cause immersion to break. What I gleaned about the story: …2014/12/032014-12-03 07:00:41
The Seal of Solomon, by Ryan Mitchell (10:00)Even with good prose and decent mechanics, a sentence parade can still overturn the apple …2014/12/022014-12-02 07:00:46
Riker, by Steve Loton (11:52)Today we discover that replicating the casual grammar of real life requires more accuracy not …2014/12/012014-12-01 07:00:25
Immortal Clay, by Michael Warren Lucas (6:58)Today we see that drama is a dish best served alone. What I gleaned about the …2014/11/282014-11-28 07:00:12
Missing, Assumed Dead, by Marva Dasef (9:44)Today we learn that even disguised as a chapter, a prologue with no information is still …2014/11/272014-11-27 07:00:06
Ghost Moon Night, by Jewel Allen (17:06)Today we see that scene and chapter breaks have a meaning. What I gleaned about the …2014/11/262014-11-26 07:00:22
Pickles and Ponies: A Fairy-Tale, by Laura May (10:00)Today we see that if you call your characters ‘human,’ readers are going to assume things like feet …2014/11/252014-11-25 07:00:06
Final Duty, by Kyle Pratt (6:50)Today we discover that writing hard sci-fi doesn’t let you use complex words and exposition …2014/11/242014-11-24 07:00:44
The Mayonnaise Murders, by Keith A. Owens (7:04)Today we see that alphabet fatigue can disorient readers quickly. What I gleaned about the story: When a …2014/11/212014-11-21 07:00:55
Magical Girls, by Jesse Brown (29:47)Today we see that people read stories for the same reason emergency response crews practice city-wide disaster scenarios. …2014/11/202014-11-20 07:00:39
Sarah’s Spaceship Adventure, by Stan Morris (7:48)Today we see that clarity is crucial for immersion. What I gleaned about the story: Sarah has …2014/11/192014-11-19 07:00:54
The Juice and Other Stories, by Bill Jones Jr. (40:00)Today we discover that the best writing is writing that doesn’t show its workings. What …2014/11/182014-11-18 07:00:31
Warrior’s Scar, by Shawn Jones (13:03)Today we see that the numbers in your story have to add up. What I gleaned about …2014/11/172014-11-17 07:00:01
Wyrd Calling, by Shen Hart (10:49)Today we see that author-publishers are accountable for layout as well as grammar. That’s what the …2014/11/142014-11-14 07:00:56
Harbinger, by Stephen Arseneault (2:56)Today we see that declarative sentence parades seem to arise from a mono-focus on physicality. What …2014/11/132014-11-13 07:00:18
Into the Aether, by T.C. Pearce (9:39)Today we see that too many characters, introduced too quickly can be disorienting. What I gleaned …2014/11/122014-11-12 07:00:01
Untimed, by Andy Gavin (40:00)Today we see that with some books, you only need to read the first line. What I …2014/11/112014-11-11 07:00:31
Science Fantasy Short Stories Volume 1 by D T Yarbrough (9:02)Today we discover that odd emotional responses require proper foreshadowing to keep the reader from assuming …2014/11/102014-11-10 07:00:27
The Brightest Light, by Scott J Robinson (11:59)Today we see that cognitive dissonance breaks immersion. What I gleaned about the story: Some kind of …2014/11/062014-11-06 07:00:15
Sector 64: Ambush, by Dean M. Cole (31:36)Today we see that echoing sentence structures can distract just as much as headwords. What I gleaned about …2014/11/062014-11-06 07:00:14
The Birth of Chaos, by Ethan James Clarke (6:18)Today we see that conflicting narration styles can undermine each other. What I gleaned about …2014/11/052014-11-05 07:00:21
To Carry the Horn, by Karen Myers (8:37)Today we see that readers don’t like to feel tricked. What I gleaned about the story: A …2014/11/042014-11-04 07:00:14
Ox Herding: A Secular Pilgrimage, by Jackie Griffiths (6:31)Today we see that repetition is no substitute for immersion. What I gleaned about the story: A …2014/11/022014-11-02 20:41:37
The String Quartet, by Dan Hupalo (5:42)Today we see that trying to do fancy text with embedded images is a bad …2014/10/312014-10-31 07:00:42
Exile’s Redemption, by Lee Dunning (9:11)Today we see that the show must sell what the exposition tells. What I gleaned …2014/10/302014-10-30 07:00:11
Having a Whaley of a Time, by Donna Keeley (7:03)Today we see that characters who have no emotional reaction to their problems are creepy. …2014/10/292014-10-29 07:00:42
Elona, by Steve Turnbull (9:13)Today we see that sometimes, a single word can just make your book its bitch. What I …2014/10/282014-10-28 07:00:13
Unraveling Time, by Kurt R.A. Giambastiani (2:43)Today I’ll try to demonstrate just what I mean by “declarative sentences on parade.” What I …2014/10/272014-10-27 07:00:35
Shooting Arrows by Beverly Ann Flynn (10:31)Today we discover that the smoothness with which you transition from one character voice to another …2014/10/252014-10-25 07:00:53
Copper Knights and Granite Men, by DiBaggio and DiBaggio (11:06)Today we see that multi-dimensional digressions are bad for your health. What I gleaned about the story: A group …2014/10/242014-10-24 07:00:18
Spindown, by George Wright Padgett (23:06)Today we see that sometimes, a sonic fork is just a fork. Even if it’s sonic. …2014/10/232014-10-23 07:00:24
Madison Lane and the Wand of Rasputin, by Elle Carter Neal (19:51)Today we see that I flame out hard on teen romance elements. What I gleaned …2014/10/222014-10-22 07:00:50
Jade Moon, by Julia Richards (10:00)Today we see that if your protagonist doesn’t care about their peril, the reader won’t either. …2014/10/212014-10-21 07:00:09
Tiem Mechine, by Alex Hansen (24:11)Today we see that a rough patch can come at you like a bridge abutment …2014/10/202014-10-20 07:00:47
At the Crossroads, by Andre Gal (9:42)Today we discover that mimicking the styles of the past can leave you on the …2014/10/182014-10-18 10:13:32
Transit Point, by A.S. Webster (9:15)Today we see that early echoes are probably a sign of more echoes to come. What …2014/10/172014-10-17 07:00:58
Silvana: The Greening, by Belinda Mellor (40:00)Today we see that stories don’t have to begin with frantic action to be entirely engaging. …2014/10/162014-10-16 07:00:00
A Dodge, A Twist, and a Tobacconist, by Sophronia Belle Lyon (24:17)Today we see that readers want time to anticipate big scenes before they happen, and then …2014/10/152014-10-15 07:00:17
Savage Dawn, by Inge Moore (16:22)Today we see that every cliché is a missed opportunity to actually write. What I gleaned …2014/10/142014-10-14 07:00:05
The Amazing Adventures of Toby the Trilby, by Angela Castillo (14:56)Today we see that impassioned religious debates from logical mathematicians are a hard pill to swallow. What …2014/10/132014-10-13 08:03:47
Before the Chase by Dara Fogel (14:51)Today we discover that where you explain your world can be more important than how …2014/10/112014-10-11 08:00:06
The Only City Left, by Andy Goldman (16:15)Today we see that when you only have yourself to talk to, the “I” can be implicit. …2014/10/102014-10-10 08:00:46
Paralan’s Children, by Katharina Gerlach (24:34)Today we see that leaving story points unresolved creates confusion and frustration for readers. What I …2014/10/092014-10-09 08:00:44
A Summoner’s Confession, by Khana Santamaria (10:27)Today we see that a mistake in your magic system can throw your entire world into …2014/10/082014-10-08 08:00:01
Flower’s Fang, by Madison Keller (4:17)Today we see that, with enough echoes piled together, even the walls of Jericho can …2014/10/072014-10-07 08:00:37
Song of the Summer King, by Jess E. Owen (6:35)Today we see that if you’re going to write about intelligent animals, you need to gather …2014/10/062014-10-06 08:00:24
Queen and Other Stories, by Lincoln CrislerToday marks the first in a series of four guest reviews being contributed by Dave Higgins. For …2014/10/042014-10-04 08:00:14
Black Jade Dragon, by Susan Brassfield Cogan (5:42)Today we see that plodding sentences are detectable, and avoidable. What I gleaned about the story: A …2014/10/032014-10-03 08:00:11
Reason For Vengeance, by Adrian D. Roberts (3:03)Today we see that an author without an editor is like a drunken highwire artist working …2014/10/022014-10-02 08:00:43
The Wizard and the Rat, by Aaron C. Engler (6:29)Today we see that popular trends in editorial fashion are sometimes wrong. What I gleaned about …2014/10/012014-10-01 08:00:23
Fancy Free, by Pam Uphoff (10:00)Today we see that opening in tell mode still keeps early immersion from forming. What …2014/09/302014-09-30 08:00:47
The Tales of Abu Nuwas, by Marva Dasef (19:19)Today we see that even minor issues become large when they cluster together to form patterns. …2014/09/292014-09-29 08:00:00
Fatal Infatuation, by Melanie Nowak (9:37)Today we ask the question: if a prologue falls in the forest but conveys no information, …2014/09/262014-09-26 08:00:47
The Tainted Awaken, by Jodi Herlick (8:34)Today we see that any drama that comes from a disguised dream sequence is about as satisfying as the …2014/09/252014-09-25 08:00:23
The Darkness Undivided, by Jesse Jack Jones (9:27)Today we see that internal contradictions form pincers that can crush immersion. What I gleaned about …2014/09/242014-09-24 08:00:44
Black, by Catherine Winters (12:43)Today we see that I am a total deaf-mute when it comes to the language of the …2014/09/232014-09-23 08:00:11
The Gentle Man, by Michelle Montague Mogil (8:27)Today we see that shifting verb tense is like changing lanes on the highway – proper …2014/09/222014-09-22 08:00:26
Willem’s Tale, by J. S. Davis (4:23)Today we see that mechanical issues popped me out before I learned anything about anybody. What I …2014/09/192014-09-19 08:00:51
Lethal Seasons, by Alice Sabo (10:45)Today we see that declarative sentence parades may be a sign that you’re looking at the …2014/09/182014-09-18 08:00:09
Inquisitor, by RJ Blain (29:08)Today we see that plausibility needs to be more than skin deep. What I gleaned …2014/09/172014-09-17 08:00:36
Henchmen, by Eric Lahti (10:00)Today we see that relentless telling can kill a witty narration. What I gleaned about the …2014/09/162014-09-16 08:00:34
The First Book of Ezekiel, by Colby R Rice (2:36)Today we see that a copy editor is a cheap inoculation against awkward visuals. What I gleaned …2014/09/152014-09-15 08:00:15
The Prophet’s Daughter, by Kilayla Pilon (3:19)Today we see that stories without details are just empty word husks swirling in a box. …2014/09/122014-09-12 08:00:39
The High King’s Embalmer, by S. Copperstone (7:47)Today we see that sometimes a tricky detail can seem right, until you actually think about …2014/09/112014-09-11 08:00:36
Space Junque, by LK Rigel (40:00)Today we see that even sub-genres that are not really my thing can survive the treadmill. What …2014/09/102014-09-10 08:00:36
Dark & Day, by Israel Grey (13:56)Today we see another very promising story hamstrung by the editing. What I gleaned about …2014/09/092014-09-09 08:00:25
Derelict, by LJ Cohen (20:21)Today we see that important character abilities should be demonstrated before they become pivotal story points. …2014/09/082014-09-08 08:00:26
Games of Chance, by William L. Hahn (20:51)Today we see that it can be disastrous to let style trump clarity. What I gleaned about …2014/09/052014-09-05 08:05:57
The Journeyman, by Michael Alan Peck (40:00)Today we see another distance-goer, with a decidedly quirky bent. What I gleaned about the story: To …2014/09/042014-09-04 08:00:19
Leap of Space, by Sharon T. Rose (6:04)Today we see that telling backstory is not the same as telling story, and eventually, …2014/09/032014-09-03 08:00:06
Protégée, by James Gawley (40:00)Today the Legions of a faux-Rome fantasy drag us behind their chariots for the full …2014/09/022014-09-02 08:00:11
Enter The Phenomenologists, by Gil C. Schmidt (5:50)Today I realize that my tolerance for mechanical errors is eroding quickly. What I gleaned about the …2014/09/012014-09-01 08:00:19
The Five Elements, by Scott Marlowe (40:00)Today we see that, sometimes, I pull the plug for what turns out to be …2014/08/292014-08-29 08:00:04
Sand and Blood, by D. Moonfire (31:01)Today a good story is eventually worn down by the accumulated abrasions of many tiny grits. What …2014/08/282014-08-28 08:00:50
The Battle, by R. W. Allen (5:18)Today I realize that without specific details, a story isn’t really a story – it’s just an …2014/08/272014-08-27 08:00:45
Shard Knight, by Matthew Ballard (8:02)Today we see that repeating yourself too often creates echoes that pop the immersion bubble. What …2014/08/262014-08-26 08:00:58
Warrior’s Embrace, by Jodi Zeitler (3:08)Today we see that if the author-publisher releases a sloppy product, readers get cranky. What I gleaned …2014/08/252014-08-25 08:00:05
Senlin Ascends, by Josiah Bancroft (10:00)Today we see another example of tell mode forming an immersion-proof coating that kept me …2014/08/222014-08-22 08:00:56
Farsprocket, by Dustin McGee (10:00)Today we see that small problems can become big problems when they happen in clusters. What …2014/08/212014-08-21 08:00:27
In Siege of Daylight, by Gregory S. Close (20:33)Today I learn that, for me, immersion sometimes breaks because of something the author didn’t …2014/08/202014-08-20 08:00:39
Century of Sand, by Christopher Ruz (40:00)Today we see a book that took on water, but got the hull sails-up again and …2014/08/192014-08-19 08:00:43
The Summerlark Elf, by Brandon Draga (10:13)Today we see that using unfamiliar words and styles without the safety net of an …2014/08/182014-08-18 08:00:27
Grounded, by Emily Matthew (8:02)Today we see that if you want to monkey with known concepts, you have to get the reader to …2014/08/152014-08-15 08:00:49
Thea of Oz, by Rebecca A. Demarest (34:59)Today we see that working in established worlds can be tricky. What I gleaned about the story: Years …2014/08/142014-08-14 08:00:16
Trouble, by RJ Price (7:21)Today we are reminded that saving money on an editor is a false economy. What I …2014/08/132014-08-13 08:00:21
As the Crow Flies, by Robin Lythgoe (30:57)Today I tease out a new and necessary component of immersion. What I gleaned about …2014/08/122014-08-12 08:00:38
The Sorcerous Crimes Division: Devilbone, by Scott Warren (4:25)Today we learn how important it is to find a place to start your story …2014/08/112014-08-11 08:00:41
The Meat Market, by James Chalk (8:47)A cool vibe trying to shine out from under the scar tissue of weak editing. …2014/08/082014-08-08 08:00:25
Mad Tinker’s Daughter, by J.S. Morin (40:00)There are times when too little information might just be enough. What I gleaned about the …2014/08/072014-08-07 08:00:36
Strictly Analog, by Richard Levesque (40:00)Sometimes a well-painted world is all it takes. What I gleaned from the story: In …2014/08/062014-08-06 08:00:33
Apex Rising, by Tom Wright (6:16)Today we focus on the importance of having characters who experience their world in believable …2014/08/052014-08-05 08:00:42
Iron Pen Anthology, by Multiple AuthorsToday I take another stab at an anthology, and I think a new policy might …2014/08/042014-08-04 08:00:06
Justice in an Age of Metal and Men, by Anthony Eichenlaub (17:17)Today’s read illustrates the immersive peril of an author-puppet protagonist. What I gleaned about the story: In …2014/08/012014-08-01 08:00:55
A Touch of Magic, by Gregory Mahan (11:11)An over-familiar opening got me started on a grumpy stride. What I gleaned about the story: A miller’s …2014/07/312014-07-31 08:00:26
Sleepwalker, by Brandy Moss (9:37)An interesting setup, but harpooned by a consistent grammatical flaw. What I gleaned about the book: A young …2014/07/302014-07-30 08:00:27
Lacuna, by David Adams (24:27)Good writing brought down by a string of unlikely coincidences. What I gleaned about the story: …2014/07/292014-07-29 08:00:39
Hosanna in Hand, by Appropouture (2:38)I have no idea what this is. What I gleaned about the story: There’s a hermit. …2014/07/282014-07-28 00:42:03
All Is Silence, by Robert L. Slater (24:39)Today I learned how sensitive I am to compounded implausibilities. What I gleaned about the …2014/07/252014-07-25 08:00:21
Crimson Son, by Russ Linton (40:00)A little bit of petulant teen goes a long way, but strong writing and an …2014/07/242014-07-24 08:00:18
The King’s Sword, by C. J. Brightley (8:27)Today we learn that there’s a difference between keeping things mysterious and simply not giving …2014/07/232014-07-23 08:00:31
Murder out of the Blue, by Steve Turnbull (10:00)Today the treadmill reveals that even a well imagined world remains locked behind a plate …2014/07/222014-07-22 08:00:22
Athame, by Morgan Alreth (34:40)A strong story that took me for a long bomb, but tripped over it’s laces …2014/07/212014-07-21 08:00:06
Scarlet Angel, by C. A. Wilke (40:00)A slick, fast-paced whoami tale, with a juicy mystery that kept me on my toes. …2014/07/182014-07-18 08:00:12
Wisdom Beyond Her Years, by J-L Heylen (17:18)Today we get stuck in the swamp of conspicuous exposition. What I gleaned about the story: …2014/07/172014-07-17 08:00:41
Shiny New Swindle, by Simon Cantan (12:54)Even when the ride is going great, a little vibration can feedback on itself and …2014/07/162014-07-16 08:00:48
White Dwarf One, by Dario Solera (14:36)On today’s show, we discover the need to establish a deadline for the immersion to …2014/07/152014-07-15 08:00:28
Discovering Aberration, by S.C. Barrus (15:27)Today we learn that if you want to affect a particular historical style, it’s not …2014/07/142014-07-14 08:00:11
The Unknown Sun, by Cheryl S. Mackey (13:00)Today’s read touches on about four things, right out of the gate, that I find difficult …2014/07/112014-07-11 08:00:45
Unselected, by John Kipling LewisToday marks another experiment. John Lewis asked me if I accept collections of flash fiction. …2014/07/102014-07-10 08:00:59
The Face-Stealer, by Robert Scott-Norton (5:28)Today I learned how strongly I feel about “borrowed” content. (Hint: I pulled the plug …2014/07/092014-07-09 08:00:34
Pay Me, Bug! by Christopher Wright (40:00)Today’s book has been a test of the emergency awesome detection system. And I do …2014/07/082014-07-08 08:00:35
Flummox or Bust, by Kevin Bowersox (16:17)Broad humor that gets in the way of the story doesn’t work for me. But …2014/07/072014-07-07 08:00:32
A Noble’s Quest, by Ryan Toxopeus (9:11)Today I issue a cautionary notice: Those who choose to play in Tolkien’s backyard are standing …2014/07/042014-07-04 08:00:58
Surviving the Fog, by Stan Morris (15:33)The take-away lesson from today’s reading is the importance of managing narrative time flow. What …2014/07/022014-07-02 11:37:03
Self Made, by Darusha Wehm (18:09)Today I realized how hard I have to struggle, as a reader, to recover after …2014/07/012014-07-01 10:13:40
Ultimate Duty, by Marva Dasef (19:45)A good example of how “Show don’t tell” doesn’t mean what you think it means, …2014/06/302014-06-30 10:19:17
River of Possibilities, by Marti Lawrence (19:37)In today’s excursion, we learn that stories that don’t breathe can suffocate a reader. What …2014/06/272014-06-27 11:25:34
The Improbable Rise of Singularity Girl, by Bryce Anderson (40:00)Today marks the first book to go the distance, and at the same time, teaches …2014/06/262014-06-26 10:25:57
The Curse of Memories, by V. Griffen (26:26)As a curious counterpoint to yesterday’s lesson, today we learn that a good story can …2014/06/252014-06-25 10:31:09
The Secret of Stonehenge, by Yury Nikitin (6:24)Today’s candidate teaches me that even grammatically correct and properly punctuated books with (presumably) a …2014/06/242014-06-24 11:19:01
Chrono Virus, by Aaron Crocco (31:08)In today’s installment, we learn that even little details matter, and that story facts have …2014/06/232014-06-23 13:12:53