Category Archives: Immerse Or Die

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Zombie Zeitgeist, by J Cornell Michel (1:15)

Today we see that starting in the middle of the action shouldn’t mean chopping off the start of events. What I gleaned about the stories: Dave put the book of…

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Broken Wizards, by Jeffrey Bardwell (4:55)

Today we see that inadequate editing is the fastest way to derail the immersion train. What I gleaned about the story: A youth who looks like the magistrate’s son is…

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A Very Short Collection of Shorts, by Rebecca Welch (1:15)

Today we see that stereotypes can work against you. What I gleaned about the stories: Words pass under eyes. Form sentences. Pages turn. The reader is unsettled before they know…

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Toby Smart, by Aaron D. Phillips (1:16)

Today we see that punctuation conventions matter, and if you don’t learn them, invented punctuation conventions will have readers racing for the hills.

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Short Stories of the Days to Come, by Kenny Yao and Kevin Yao (0:40)

Today we see several ways to erode a reader’s confidence before they even reach page one. What I gleaned about the stories: Apparently, the United Nations has several locations. Find…