Category Archives: Immerse Or Die

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Sonoran Dreams: Three Short Stories from Exile, by Robb Grindstaff (2:33)

Today we see that lists of things are supposed to be easy to read.

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The Dark of Light, by Audrey Sharpe (7:47)

Today we see that it’s hard to feed your reader worldbuilding porridge while a giant chocolate cake of dramatic tension is being wheeled by.

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Blood and Beauty and Other Weird Tales, by Jeff Chapman (2:14)

Today we see that if you don’t tell readers who your protagonist is, they will subconsciously fill in the blanks, and then blame you when their guesses turn out to be wrong.

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The Fire Mages, by Pauline M. Ross (29:29)

Today a young girl named Kyra takes us on a whirlwind journey to her heart’s desire, but forgets to let us experience it with her.

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Discordia: Short Stories from The Golden Apple of Discord, by Lauren Hodge (0:51)

Today we see that an overly stylized narrative voice can push readers away rather than drawing them in. What I gleaned about the stories: Supernatural entities can easily be identified by…