What I gleaned about the story: Amber Fang is a vampire librarian with a strict moral code about who she’ll eat. Only murderers who feel no remorse. And that makes her the perfect recruit for a newly formed secret agency bent on ridding the world of dastardly villains.
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Analysis: It’s a first POV story that opens on an action scene, with our vampire protagonist closing in for her first kill of the book. The pairing of first person narration and physical action combines to generate a lot of “I”-headed sentences. I verbed. I also verbed. I verbed some more. But I’m intrigued by the situation, in which her prey turns out to be not quite as prey-like as she had expected. So there was a flurry of steadily stuttering I, I, I sentences for a while, but I kept my shoulder to the wind and pressed on.
Details: Amber regains consciousness after a harrowing escape and we get this bit of internal narration: I wondered if I’d developed cataracts. A sight-impaired vampire having to beg food to come just a little bit closer is the saddest thing under the sun.
And that was the only disruption I found. After that, the rest of the 40 minutes just sailed by, with a series of twists and turns that kept my nose in the book and the pages flying. I think what sucked me in the hardest is the premise itself: a vampire librarian with a moral code about who she’ll eat gets recruited by the government to kill foreign bad guys. And she tops it off with a black sense of humor. What’s not to love? This one is definitely going onto my “read to completion” pile. In fact, I’m just going to go do that now.
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