Stories, by Samie Foster (0:46)

iod-storiesfosterToday we see that, as a publisher, you need to make sure that your book is actually your book.

What I gleaned about the stories: Children left alone during a rainstorm are prone to thoughts of ghosts.

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Note: This is a short story collection, so the rules are slightly different from standard Immerse or Die: instead of reading on every time I lose immersion, I stop reading that story and move on to the next one. As usual, I stop reading after the third WTF.

WTF #1: Declarative sentence parade

Analysis: The first story opened with a paragraph of: The noun did this… It was… They did that… Every time the image started to build, I found myself instead seeing someone describing the facts after the event for a witness statement, so I moved on.

WTF #2: File issue

Analysis: When I attempted to move on, I discovered the file ended toward the end of the first story. While I can think of a number of reasons why it might not be a mistake by the author/publisher, it certainly prevented immersion.

Roughly estimating from the table of contents, the end-point didn’t occur at 10% so I assume it wasn’t the retailer accidentally delivering the sample instead of the full book.

Take the Pepsi Challenge: Want to know if my own writing measures up? Download one of these free short stories, in the format of your choice, and decide for yourself.

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About the author

Dave Higgins has worked in law and IT for both public and private sector organisations. When not pursuing these hobbies, he writes poetry and speculative fiction.

He was born in Wiltshire, England. Raised by a librarian, he started reading shortly after birth and has not stopped since. He currently lives in Bristol with his wife, Nicola, his cats, Jasper and Una, and many shelves of books.